第1节 雅思写作7分大师课-Task 1引言段改写心法

第一课:7分引言段写作心法

7分引言写作心法 🧠

掌握万能公式,写出考官一眼就爱上的完美开篇!

开始学习!

第一幕:引言的“灵魂”

范文解构活动

“我们先来解剖一篇7分范文,看看它为什么能得高分。请大家在小组里讨论,它包含了哪些关键信息?”

原题 (Original Question): The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over in Japan, Sweden and the USA between 1940 and 2040.

7分范例 (Band 7 Model):

“The line graph illustrates the percentage of elderly people aged 65 and over in Japan, Sweden, and the USA over a century from 1940 to 2040.”

教师总结:高分引言的两大支柱

支柱一: 完整改写
用自己的话重述题目信息,而不是照抄原文。
支柱二: 要素齐全
包含图表类型、核心主题、地点、时间等所有关键点。

第二幕:改写的“手术刀”

技巧一:动词替换

不要总用 “show”,试试这些更专业的动词。

提示词: “IMA, can you give me some synonyms for ‘show’ in an academic context?”
IMA 的建议

当然!除了 ‘show’,你可以使用: illustrates, demonstrates, depicts, presents, compares, gives information about 等。

技巧二:名词与主题重塑

改写核心名词是提分的关键。

提示词: “IMA, how can I paraphrase ‘the number of tourists’?”
IMA 的建议

你可以这样改写: tourist figures, the quantity of visitors, statistics on tourism 等。

技巧三:地点与时间状语变形

改写时间和地点是让句子“活”起来的关键一步。

提示词: “IMA, how can I paraphrase ‘from 1990 to 2000’?”
IMA 的建议

你可以这样改写: over a 10-year period, between 1990 and 2000, during the period from 1990 to 2000 等。

技巧四:句式重组 (高分秘笈)

主动句变被动句,是提升学术性的快捷方式。

提示词: “IMA, can you change this sentence to passive voice: ‘The chart shows the data.'”
IMA 的建议

当然!被动语态是: The data is shown in the chart. 或者 Information about… is provided in the chart. 这种句式在Task 1中非常常用且正式。

第三幕:万能公式

7分引言万能公式

[图表类型] + [强力动词] + [改写后的核心主题] + [关键信息]

引导性写作练习

题目: The bar chart compares the average hours spent on household chores per week by men and women in five different countries in 2019.

“现在,请严格按照公式的四个部分,把下面的内容填进去,然后组合成一句话!”

第四幕:毕业挑战

终极挑战:流程图

题目: The diagram below illustrates the various stages involved in the production of cement, and how concrete is made using this cement.

“公式能用在流程图上吗?当然!请用我们的万能公式,写出这道题的引言。”

IMA 的反馈

预估: 7.5

点评: 非常棒!公式完全适用!

💡 参考版本: “The diagram (图表类型) illustrates (强力动词) how cement is produced (改写主题) through a multi-stage process (关键信息).”

教师资源包 (备用题目 & 词汇表)

备用题目库 (Additional Practice)

  • Table: The table below shows the percentage of students participating in different sports at a university in 2000 and 2020.
  • Maps: The diagrams show the layout of a university’s sports center now and proposed changes for the future.

高频替换词表 (Synonym List)

原文7分+替换词
showillustrate, demonstrate, depict, present, give information about, compare
proportion/percentagerate, share, distribution, percentage
numberfigure, quantity, statistic
from… to…over the period from…to…, between…and…, covering X years
aboutregarding, concerning, related to
changetrend, variation, shift, development
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